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In many situations, people who break the law should be warned instead of punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some feel that law-breakers ought to be entitled to a warning
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 of strict sanctions. I largely disagree with
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 sentiment as
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 is crucial for society at large. Those who argue in favour of warnings claim that incarceration encourages a cycle of criminal behaviour.
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, if an individual is arrested for a low-level narcotics offence, there is a strong chance the incident will become part of their permanent record.
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 makes it more difficult to apply for jobs or seek higher education. If the perpetrator in question
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 spends time in prison
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, they may have made connections among the prisoner population. All these factors combine to increase the likelihood of committing
crimes
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 in the future since other avenues have become restricted. If the offence is insignificant, the
punishment
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 appears to do more harm than good. Though the policy detailed above is logical for very minor infractions,
punishment
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 is needed for most
crimes
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. The various justifications for
punishment
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 typically include deterrence, rehabilitation, public safety and justice itself. Of these, deterrence is the most often cited and effective. Most potential criminals do not commit
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 because they are aware of the punishments and
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 ensures a minimum degree of public safety. If a person knew they would only receive a warning for a more serious infraction,
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 there would almost undoubtedly be more crime. Even in the case of negligible offences, stronger punishments that are not part of one’s permanent record would better curb future criminality. In conclusion, though warnings may be preferable for certain minor
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, the principle of deterrence justifies
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. If a system of warnings were combined with other measures,
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 as improved education and mental health support,
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 reform would be more feasible.
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