People believe that arts like painting and music does not directly improve the quality of life, and therefore they think government’s money should be spent on other things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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by some

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like painting and music

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not directly improve the quality of

life

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therefore

they think

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money should be spent on other things. I completely disagree with the opinion

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and think

arts

affect societies in a nice way in the world .

Arts

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many

children

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life

or they can finish wars and

poorness

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in our lives . Unfortunately , many

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struggle with

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, and

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many societies

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bad days due to these problems .

On the other hand

arts

directly affect their

life

in a nice way if governments still continue to reach

arts

for these societies .

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Leanordo

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Leonardo

vinci

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who

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the

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most

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painter finished the

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a hundred years ago thanks to his art , and afterwards countries rescued wars and

poorness

Secondly

, many

children

can't discover their talents , and

thus

they live an ordinary

life

like many

people

. These

children

can finish a

war

or they can teach many

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different

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different

things to other

people

if governments still display care

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needs .

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Bethoween

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couldn't give many important

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if the government didn't display

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interested

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with

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could

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other jobs

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a doctor

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doctor

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teacher

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and lawyer

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lawyer

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. İn conclusion ,

arts

can do many things

such

as finish

war

, touch

children

in our lives , and

thus

governments should continue

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spend

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their money

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art . Many

children

can be like

Leanordo

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Leonardo

vinci

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or many

people

will protect from wars thanks to

arts

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the arts

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