People believe that arts like painting and music does not directly improve the quality of life, and therefore they think government’s money should be spent on other things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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is consider

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by some

people

that

arts

like painting and music

does

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not directly improve the quality of

life

, and

therefore

they think

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the government’s

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money should be spent on other things. I completely disagree with the opinion

,

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and think

arts

affect societies in a nice way in the world .

Arts

can touch

to

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many

children

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life

or they can finish wars and

poorness

.

Firstly

, there are many troubles

such

as

war

,

poorness

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and poorness

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in our lives . Unfortunately , many

country

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countries

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struggle with

war

and

poorness

, and

therefore

many societies

exposure

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bad days due to these problems .

On the other hand

,

arts

directly affect their

life

in a nice way if governments still continue to reach

arts

for these societies .

For instance

,

Leanordo

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Leonardo

da

vinci

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who

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the

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most

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painter finished the

african

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war

a hundred years ago thanks to his art , and afterwards countries rescued wars and

poorness

.

Secondly

, many

children

can't discover their talents , and

thus

they live an ordinary

life

like many

people

. These

children

can finish a

war

or they can teach many

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different

diffent

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different

things to other

people

if governments still display care

with

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needs .

For instance

,

Bethoween

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Between

couldn't give many important

song

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songs

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if the government didn't display

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art

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arts

care that needs , and

therefore

many

people

who

interested

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with

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in

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arts

could

has

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have

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other jobs

such

as

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a doctor

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doctor

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doctors

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,

teacher

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teachers

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,

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and lawyer

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lawyer

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. İn conclusion ,

arts

can do many things

such

as finish

war

, touch

children

in our lives , and

thus

governments should continue

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to spend

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spend

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spending

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their money

to

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on

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art . Many

children

can be like

Leanordo

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Leonardo

da

vinci

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Vinci

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or many

people

will protect from wars thanks to

arts

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the arts

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.