Young people have different ideas and attitudes with their parents and grandparents. What are the differences? What problems may be caused?

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generation
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gap, new
concept
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concepts
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and
upbringing
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the upbringing
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of
youngsters
differ completely from their
parents
and grandparents. Young people's behaviour and ideas are different from theirs and sometimes
this
can lead to
incomprension
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incomprehension
and disagreement between them. One factor which has changed the mindset of
youngsters
is
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rules and regulations set on them, leading them to be a more extrovert
person
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, having their own opinions and they do set their own rules.
Moreover
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youngster's
punishment
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punishments
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at school
are
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less severe
,
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when they misbehave now,
there
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is psychological
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made with them rather than severe rules imposed on them. Being exposed to violence due to technology, we have observed that
youngsters
have the tendency to be violent and repulsive, they often get clash with their
parents
and grandparents and do not respect them. Values
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a fundamental part in
youngsters
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life, it is apparently sad that values
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disappearing
disapearing
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disappearing
in our society due to children
are
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disconnected
to
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prayers. Long ago, it was compulsory that a child would accompany his
parents
to mass on a weekly basis. Now children do not accompany their
parents
to
prayers
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sessions. Fashion, technology, society and schools contribute massively
in
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the behaviour of
youngsters
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life. I believe that
ways
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the ways
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of thinking and attitudes of a young person will differ from
the
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one
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ones
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of his
parents
and grandparents.
However
, there should be some coherence and comprehension between the three parties, there should be respect among the beliefs of all three to make things go easier.
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