The pie charts compares ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.

The pie charts compares ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
The pie charts illustrate the percentages of many
ways
to
access
the news which are : TV, radio, print , online and others in
Canada
and
Australia
.
Overall
, in both countries, the most significant
ways
to
access
the press are online and TV , which together
accounts
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for more than half the others
ways
while
radio and not specified generate the least users to
access
the news . In all types of
ways
, there are only minimal changes between the two countries. The way of
access
to news by radio
,
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comprised 7% in
Canada
and
this
showed only a slight decrease in
Australia
of about 2% .
Likewise
, in not specified and print which accounts for 3% and 14% in
Canada
,
while
in
Australia
generates at about 2% and 7% respectively. In terms of online , there was about 36 % in
Canada
,
While
in
Australia
there was an approximate growth of about 52% .TV ,
on the other hand
, was only one way which decreed sharply from 40% in
Canada
to 37% in
Australia
.
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