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The pie charts compares ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.

The pie charts compares ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentages of many
ways
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 to
access
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 the news which are : TV, radio, print , online and others in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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.
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, in both countries, the most significant
ways
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 to
access
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 the press are online and TV , which together
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 for more than half the others
ways
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while
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 radio and not specified generate the least users to
access
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 the news . In all types of
ways
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 , there are only minimal changes between the two countries. The way of
access
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 to news by radio
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comprised 7% in
Canada
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 and
this
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 showed only a slight decrease in
Australia
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 of about 2% .
Likewise
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, in not specified and print which accounts for 3% and 14% in
Canada
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 ,
while
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 in
Australia
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 generates at about 2% and 7% respectively. In terms of online , there was about 36 % in
Canada
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 ,
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 in
Australia
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 there was an approximate growth of about 52% .TV ,
on the other hand
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 , was only one way which decreed sharply from 40% in
Canada
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 to 37% in
Australia
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ways, access, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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