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Some people think that keeping animals as pets at home is beneficial for the family. Others oppose and say it is a bad idea. Do you think keeping pets have a advantages? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? explain your answer with reasons and include examples.

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There is a saying,
'a
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dog
 is a
mans'
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best friend
bestfriend
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best friend
'. A
dog
 has always been a companion for humans and
thought
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 to be helpful in many families.
Pets
 are
animals
 that give endless love. Some might think having
pets
 is not beneficial because it can be a lot of work. I believe having a pet is useful. While acknowledging the downfalls of having
pets
,
this
 essay will highlight that the benefits outweigh the downfalls.
Pets
 are
animals
 that give endless love. As the saying mentioned above, compared to humans, dogs are loyal and will be good companions.
Pets
 are instinctive, they
also
 understand when their owner is sad or having a bad day. Just because they are '
animals
' does not mean they do not sense the atmosphere of their surroundings. When my
friends'
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 father retired he felt very lonely. He suffered from depression for
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awhile
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 and the family decided to get him a
dog
. Ever since 'Cookie', the
dog
, came into his life, he was much happier. It followed the dad everywhere he went and kept him company while watching television.
Animals
 are just as needy as humans. They require lots of attention and care. It can be quite burdensome for some people.
Pets
,
such
 as dogs, need to be fed, washed
,
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 and walked multiple times a day. The attention it needs is the same as having a baby.
This
 can cause stress and anxiety, especially, if someone works. Workers, who work from 9 am to 5 pm, do not have much time to spare. To conclude,
although
 having an animal in the family can be stressful,
they
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 can nourish an empty heart and fill it with joy.
Hence
, I believe
pets
 are definitely advantageous for a family.
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