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The Only Reason For Learning A Foreign Language Is Work Or Travel . To what extent do you agree or disagree.?

#reason #language #work #travel
Learning a foreign
language
 argued by some people is only for working or travelling. Even though it was true reasons, it is not only the objectives. I do not agree with the statement because I believe there are other motives
such
 as continuing a
study
 and
friendship
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 that I will explain in
this
 essay. In
this
 modern life, many people have the intention to
study
 abroad for
better
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 future. They have some preparations when though
this
 occasion including the
language
. It is a crucial
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despite
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he
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her
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has
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a
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good academic achievement,
for example
, every university obliges the student's admission with a minimum
language
 score. The score varied between universities;
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 with
english
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language
 instruction requires
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 score of 7.0 in
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Therefore
, many registrants spend a lot of
resource
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such
 as time, training, and the cost to meet the requirement. Young people in
this
 digital living have an amazing connection to the world through their social media. They love to learn
the
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languages because it
make
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 a good relationship with their friends.
Although
 they can access the online dictionary easily, they need an active
language
 that
used
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 in some communications. It is
important
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 skill
to
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 them when
make
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 voice or video calls.
Additionally
, it will have
positive
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 impact
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 exchange
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cultural
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of
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diversity for
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 generation. To conclude, another reason for learning a foreign
language
 is both
study
 and friendship. I suspect there are other numerous motivations
besides
 work, travel,
study
, and friendship. Even though it was many reasons, everyone concurs
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 urgency of learning
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 foreign
language
 in
this
 period.
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