Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
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should have
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to do volunteer
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in their leisure time because it brings benefits for both the young and
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. While there are a number of advantages of joining
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campaigns for unpaid
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work
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, I partly disagree with
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notion. On the one hand, it is true that participating in many unpaid
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activities may bring many benefits for both the young and the
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. From the individual perspective,
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can develop their soft
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quickly by learning from their colleagues if they
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in the campaigns.
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, when
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have
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to
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in a team,
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require
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communication skill and
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work
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skill, as much as possible, they can improve and develop those
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.
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, from
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society
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view, those
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society
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activities can create a high-quality workforce,
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are
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the leader of the country,
for
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the future. Because
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those teenagers have been trained when they are very young,
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their soft
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and expertise will
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better.
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, spending time on unpaid
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work
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instead
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of concentrating on studying can influence the young’s studies results, which is really important for their future. A host of people agree that you need to have some degrees from universities or schools,
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teach you the expertise of your jobs
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if you want to have a decent job. Forcing teenagers to do unpaid
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work
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reduce
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their time to improve their knowledge or participate in many seminars which can open the new world and help them more active in globalization.
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, not anyone
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to do
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volunteer
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environment.
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, who
do
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not like to interact with so
much
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strangers, called introverts, can may
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get some mental illness and some of them can
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themselves as a way to reject
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. In conclusion, while doing unpaid
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society
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work
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can improve
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soft
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and bring many benefits
for
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community
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, I suggest that we can not force everyone to do
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because the drawbacks are more outweigh the advantages.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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