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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. what are the advantages and disadvtanges of this trend?

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We are losing our expensive culture , due to the development of humans , while we should take care of our parents, at that time they live in the older
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 essay explains the advantages and disadvantages of the above statement. The
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 and foremost reason is that a few groups of people think that it will be of no use to us , owing to their
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 they become a burden to the family ,
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 , they are not able to work after come in 60
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 the reason they have to stay home ,
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, which decreases the budget of the family.
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 , owing to their
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 , they are victims of many diseases,
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 increasing the family expense ,
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 , every year , 60% of older facing a serious illness and spend thousands of capital on them.
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 , the government saves lots of bucks because , they release many schemes for them and spend flooded capital but if they live there , it will help to use somewhere which really need ,
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 as in India , many schemes are running for them so which is not used by the law in education , construction and some other way.
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 , they have a good sense of humour because they spend more years than us on the earth ,
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 we can gain knowledge from there,
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 , nowadays , many businessmen are holding companies but they all are
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 is over the fifty ,
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 , they can run it well. In conclusion , we must take care of them , due to their favours, we should not forget their gratitude and bring all the things, which they need and they will give us knowledge of life.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • trained staff
  • social activities
  • interaction with peers
  • loneliness
  • safety features
  • round-the-clock supervision
  • well-being
  • careers
  • personal lives
  • emotional distress
  • abandoned
  • financial burden
  • quality of care
  • required standards
  • loss of independence
  • structured environment
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