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Some people say that in all levels of education from primary to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. do you agree or disgree?

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With the differences in focus in
education
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 over
time
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, there have been heated debates about whether or not schools, from primary to university, should emphasize more on practical
skills
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. While some convey that students should spend more
time
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 learning facts, others maintain that youngsters should gain more live experience via lessons. Given the curriculum of classes and the importance of learning facts, I utterly believe that the schools are spending just the right amount of
time
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 on both academics and practical knowledge. In regard to the extensive
education
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 we have in Hong Kong, students are exposed to an array of
subjects
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 that teach them factual ideas and living techniques.
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, participating in volunteer work is mandatory so as to develop positive personal traits and interpersonal
skills
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 in school children.
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, most, if not all, academics include classes like cooking and sewing in order to let the younger generation experience different everyday occasions. Despite the fact that more hours are spent on academic
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,
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 as mathematics and languages, I believe the current teaching curriculum has delivered just the right amount of
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 in different aspects.
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, I am totally satisfied with the conventional
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 plan where facts and practical
skills
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 are included.
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, knowledge of textbooks provides a fundamental understanding of different
subjects
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 which allow them to map out their future career pathway. Let us not forget that schools are to prepare the youth for their future life and working takes up an enormous part in life. If students only learn
skills
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, like repairing light sockets and using washing machines, they would not be able to pick their focus in university or determine their vocation.
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, it is undoubtedly necessary for them to experiment on a wide range of
subjects
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 before they can locate where their interest and natural talents converge, and decide where their expertise lies. Having discussed that the current teaching syllabus has balanced the amount of
time
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 spent on both aspects and rudimentary knowledge is necessary to be employed, I am affirmative that all levels of
education
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 satisfy different needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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