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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet, To what extent do you aree or disagree?

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I’m against a vegetarian
diet
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 due to the fact that there are 22 types of amino
acids
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 that are used in the human
body
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.
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them are essential amino
acids
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 and one of them cannot be obtained from vegetables.
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, in order to
gain
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 the daily calories needed in a vegetarian
diet
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, a
person
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 needs to in large amounts and frequently. Below, I’ll explore these reasons in more depth.
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 of all, the human
body
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 cannot get the necessary amino
acids
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 only from a vegetarian
diet
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. Amino
acids
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 are like building blocks or materials to build a house. If you don’t have all of the required materials, you can only build so much.
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, to lay a foundation, a
person
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 only requires the concrete to be poured.
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, if the
person
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 is going to build a wooden structure,
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 needs to have nails.
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, a missing amino acid is going to be devastating when the
body
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 wants to build or repair its parts.
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, in a mixed
diet
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, a
person
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 can
gain
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 the daily calories, minerals, vitamins and fibres required from so many different sources.
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, if the
person
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 is following a plant-based
diet
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, it would be so difficult to
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 as much
as
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in the same amount of time. Following a mixed or carnivorous
diet
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 gives us the ability to
gain
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 the calories required in a timely fashion. In a nutshell, a mixed
diet
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 or carnivorous
diet
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 has the benefit of supplying the human
body
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 with the required minerals, amino
acids
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, fibres and many other essential resources in a better and more efficient way. A
person
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 who is following a vegetarian
diet
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 must rely on food supplements to pursue their
diet
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 choice.

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