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Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that living in metropolitan
cities
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 negatively affects the
health
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 of
people
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 there. In my view, I indeed agree about the fact that being a city dweller might badly impact the person physically and psychically. Some
people
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 hold that the urban population's well-being is at risk which is related to many environmental issues, mainly air pollution.
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, vibrant
cities
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 are very well known for their traffic jams and the presence of factories, meaning a higher level of toxic gases being released into the air that directly affects the person's respiratory system.
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, the urban population is more likely to suffer from respiratory diseases
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 as asthma which is can be attributed to the factories' released smoke that irritates the respiratory tract of predisposed patients.
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, some
people
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 are connecting the fact of living in a big city to possible
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 issues.
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,
people
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 living in megacities often adopt a lifestyle that put them under constant pressure that sometimes becomes unbearable affecting them psychologically. There is intense competition when it comes to finding a job in
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cities
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, so
people
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 there, find themselves obliged to impress their employers in order to keep up with their expectations, which is overwhelming most of the time.
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, the expense of living in large
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 is
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 an added pressure, particularly for young adults who still struggle to secure a job.
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,
people
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 in big
cities
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 are in a constant stressful state which affects their mental and physical
health
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. In conclusion, some
people
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 deem that the
health
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 of city dwellers is threatened by residing in
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 areas. I think that many environmental and psychological issues do indeed affect and put the well-being of the megacities' population at risk.
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