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Topic: Crime rate in most countries is often higher in urban areas than rural areas. why do you think that is? what can be done to reduce crime rate?

#topic #crime #rate #countries #areas
It is undeniable that nowadays, the population tend to commit
crimes
 has increased for many
reasons
. Some people believe that the percentage of crime in most
countries
 dramatically increased in the city as much as in suburban
areas
.
However
, from my point of view, I agree with the previous point and have possibilities to solve these
problems
, the
reasons
 to support and describe the details will be outlined.
First
 of all, I strongly believe that the crime rate is increasing nowadays most of the
criminals
 who commit
crimes
 have
reasons
 and
that is
 the main cause.
Additionally
, the solution to these
causes
 the law enforcement officers should investigate these
causes
 by asking the
reasons
, why most of them need to commit the
crimes
 and become good listeners most of these is a small
cases
Change the noun form
case
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such
 as stealing valuable things and fighting most incidents happen in rural
areas
 more than urban
areas
.
On the contrary
, Some
criminals
 commit
crimes
 without
reasons
 or unforgivable
reasons
such
 as racist
cases
 and mass-shooting
cases
 most of these criminal
cases
 happen in urban
areas
.
Additionally
, the
causes
 are from some
countries
 people have the right to have a gun or use human rights in the wrong way. The best way to fix these
problems
 is that
countries
 should have new laws and seriously vanish these
problems
 by gaining the penalty in guilt. In conclusion, some
criminals
 committed the crime because they have their own
reasons
 most of them commit small
crimes
such
 as stealing valuable things and fighting the ways to solve these
problems
 law enforcement officers should investigate these
causes
 by asking that
reasons
 and become good listeners, while Some
criminals
 commit the
crimes
 without
reasons
 or unforgivable
reasons
such
 as racist-
cases
 and mass-shooting
cases
 that incident most happen in urban
areas
 and the way to solve these solutions is the
countries
 should have new laws and seriously to vanish these
problems
 by gain the penalty in guilt.
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