Many students find it difficult to pay attention at school. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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two decades, we have observed that
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are having
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problems at school.
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technology
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the solutions to
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problem in the essay. The focus of
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nowadays is primary on their mobile
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use of
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many
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, speech delay and
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kids
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more violent. Parents and teachers should set strict rules and regulations for
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of
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about the time and the contents that children are watching.
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, Art and music are
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of education which help kids to develop motor skills,
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colours, developing
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the sense of listening.
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conclusion, I believe that until
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and social media, the
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of kids at school will remain unchanged. Government and parents have their
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to put severe conditions
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young people and should encourage other activities
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encourage them to practice sport.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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