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Some countries allow older people to work to any age what they want . Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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It is often argued that some countries are facing age population problems like Japan and the USA and allow their older citizens to
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 whenever they want in their late 60s and 70s. In my opinion, I think that the merits of
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 outweigh the demerits and I will explain my reasons for it in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, there are many benefits of
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 to allow older
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 to
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 at any age whenever they want.
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 and foremost, it will help them to depend on themselves
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 of dependent on their government and children.
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, Japan has the highest old-age dependency rate which is around 50 person age of over 65 out of 100 dependent on themselves.
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, the government
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 do not worry about pension for them,
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 is because
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 are still working in their later 60s and 70s.
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, companies do not need to recruit new employees and can save the money which will they spend on new workers on their training and skills.
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, despite the advantages of
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 has some demerits.
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, it will reduce the chances of a job for youngsters due to the high rate of old workers.
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, if companies will not recruit new employees and retain old workers,
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, it will affect negatively youngster career and they will jobless.
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, in the late 70s and 80s, most
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 are unfit and had many chances of accidents for almost every duty like police and navy
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, old citizens are facing a number of diseases like heart attack and high blood pressure and for that reason, they are not able to
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 in their late 80s. To conclude, after considering all, I think that the advantages of
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 outweigh the disadvantages because old
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 are dependent on themselves and the government does not worry about their pension.
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