It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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There are some people that say that travel broadens the mind. Before I used to think that they were just kidding me when they told me that, but after I have experienced it I have changed my opinion and now I really agree with them.

Last

summer on holiday, I travelled to Beijing (China) with my family. The

first

week we went just to the tourist parts: we visited some important museums, walked through the Chinese wall, went to restaurants and tasted very different kinds of foods like insects, crocodile meat, penguin... So the

first

days we really enjoyed them as we were seeing just the superficial part of China. But the

week, we decided to change the hotel, which was located in the city centre and went to another one located on the outside of the city.

Then

there we started to see the reality of China. A rich country with a very poor population, kids stealing food from restaurants, adults sleeping on the streets without socks, street dogs that don't have water to drink, very old houses near to fall down... We saw some things that we could never have imagined can happen in

this

century, we got really shocked so there we ended our holidays and came back to Spain. I really recommend people that don't have the opportunity to travel to don't believe always what they see and

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