It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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There are some people that say that travel broadens the mind. Before I used to think that they were just kidding me when they told me that, but after I have experienced it I have changed my opinion and now I really agree with them.

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summer on holiday, I travelled to Beijing (China) with my family. The

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week we went just to the tourist parts: we visited some important museums, walked through the Chinese wall, went to restaurants and tasted very different kinds of foods like insects, crocodile meat, penguin... So the

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days we really enjoyed them as we were seeing just the superficial part of China. But the

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week, we decided to change the hotel, which was located in the city centre and went to another one located on the outside of the city.

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there we started to see the reality of China. A rich country with a very poor population, kids stealing food from restaurants, adults sleeping on the streets without socks, street dogs that don't have water to drink, very old houses near to fall down... We saw some things that we could never have imagined can happen in

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century, we got really shocked so there we ended our holidays and came back to Spain. I really recommend people that don't have the opportunity to travel to don't believe always what they see and

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Today more and more people wants things instantly( eg: goods, service, news,...) Why is this? Is it positive or negative development.

Excessive sugar consumption causes many diseases. Some people think that it is the government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption while others think that it is the individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of fitness are decreasing. what do you think are the cause of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?