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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in.

#countries #people #bout #history #house
Nowadays it is easier to find the data about
history
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 of any buildings or places ,than it was before, because now
people
 have the internet and required facilities.
Growing
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 number of
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people
 are interested in finding
a past information
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past information
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 about the house or building where they live.
This
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principal
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 causes
why
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this
 happens
,
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 and possible ways of how the
researches
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 could be done. First and foremost, there are a lot of possible reasons why
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people
 want to do
researches
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research
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 about the past of their houses and buildings. Some of them are, the process itself and interesting things that
person
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 can find. Doing
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,
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 can be very
funny
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 and interesting, and
this
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 great activity to do with the family.
Furthermore
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 there
are
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 a big chance to find some precious things like coins or
jewelers
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 in the backyard or near the house.
Moreover
,
such
 investigations can be easily done. To find
more
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out more
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 about the history, current residents can ask some
question
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 from the
people
 who lived in
this
 building before.
Also
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 homeowners can go to a local library, in order to find some old newspapers, where could be the information about
theirs
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 buildings. If the residents want to find jewelers or ancient coins, they can use metal
detector
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detectors
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.
To sum up
, there are a lot of causes why
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people
 do
researches
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, to get possible emotions or precious things. Investigations can be easily done by using past residents or historical information and
people
 can use metal
detector
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detectors
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 as well.
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