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Some people believe that families of politicians should not be allowed to study or seek medical attention abroad. Do you agree or disagree?

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In every progressive
society
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 it is a common expectation that the leaders be accountable to those they lead. It is for
this
 reason that many people share the opinion that families of the running class should be banned from seeking health
care
 services and education overseas and I strongly agree with them.
Firstly
,
because
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this
 restriction will force the leaders to improve the local health
care
 system and academic institutions.
Secondly
, it will reduce the cost of governance. If the loved ones of politicians are stopped from going outside the
country
 for health and learning purposes, those in authority will have no option but to fully develop the schools and hospitals under their administration.
Consequently
 making the
country
 the best place for not just their family members but the entire citizens.
For example
, in Nigeria today, there is an ongoing strike of the entire academic staff of all federal universities in the
country
 and unfortunately, the people in power
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don
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 not seem to
care
.
However
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 the reverse would have been the case if these VIPs had words in Nigerian universities. The
national
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 Treasury will be relieved of
unnecessary
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 financial burden of spending foreign currency to
care
 for the medical needs of a small section of the citizens and
consequently
 the value of the local currency will improve. The current devaluation of the naira
as a result
 of spending other
country's
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 money is a perfect example. To round up, I believe it is a very good idea to get all the relatives of those in power to patronize our local academic institutes and medical
centers
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. So as to enable the
country
have
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world class
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 schools and
care
 facilities
in addition
 to a great reduction in the cost of governance
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