For many people the reason they work hard is to earn money. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, everyone is running behind wealth blindly.Earning wealth is
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of the art everyone wants to master ,
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,hard
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is not
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of the ways to earn
money
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and I completely disagree that laymen do hard
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to earn
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only.My subsequent crumb of writing will elucidate my viewpoints with relevant examples. Commencing with, the ultimate goal of hard
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is not
money
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but to achieve different aspects of life. From
childhood
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students learn and
work
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hard so that
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day they will join a prestigious college,
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, things didn't end up here, students still competing with fellow mates to get
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good
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which is a key to
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corporate
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with the handsome salaries.
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, to clear
IIT
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entrance, I had to
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had to spend 15-16 hours
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studies, cut off from myself from social media and friends to clear the entrance exams,but fails.
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,
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hard
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also
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brings other abilities like dedication and commitment
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work
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.
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, to get promotional early in the private organisation
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had to compete with fellow colleagues, think out of
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and complete the project with 100% accuracy.Hard
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along with
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smart
work
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brings reputation and respect.Doing all
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thing
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is not a key to
earn
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earning
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money
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but it's a guarantee to earn respect and fame,even labour do the hard
work
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throughout the day but earn less than 3
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a day
in
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apply
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which he or she can survive. To conclude,in my opinion,
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
brings confidence,concentration and respect, even
uneducated
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an uneducated
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person can
also
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earn wealth,but the ple,
asure
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sure
to earn all
such
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thing
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is
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a
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different level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • necessities
  • monetary rewards
  • quality of life
  • luxury items
  • dependents
  • responsibility
  • pursue
  • personal interests
  • cultural pressures
  • wealth accumulation
  • fulfillment
  • visible measure
  • correlate
  • secure future
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • entertainment
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