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Some believe that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while other think it is more important to reward students who show progress. Discuss both views and express your own opinion?

#believe #schools #reward #students #show #results #progress
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It is widely acknowledged that study
results
 are one of the most crucial things for
the
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most
students
 to try so hard to achieve their
goal
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. Some people support the opinion that
students
 who can get the
reward
 from school should have high-grade points.
However
, some others believe that rewards should be given to
students
 who can be developed talents and tend to significantly progress in academic
results
. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support both of these viewpoints will be outlined.
First
 of all, I strongly believe that most
students
 are not good at studying because of the problems in their life that make
students
 can not focus well on their studies
such
 as some
students
 working a part-time job every day to save money, some people have older parents should back to take care does not have much time to reading and studying.
However
, most of these kinds of person they have some opportunities to study well because there does not have many ways to choose it and studying is one of the most crucial things to make them have a good and best job afterwards. that
schools
 should be sponsors and
reward
 them and become an important role for those
students
.
On the contrary
, Some
students
 have talents in studying which means
this
 is the right way that school should
reward
 them and other reasons their make that school become famous and get advantages from their skills which means it is normally that
schools
 should be taking care in
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. In conclusion, these two opinions about whether
schools
 should
reward
students
 who reveal the best study
results
 or
schools
 should
reward
students
 who tend to significantly progress in academic
results
,
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is still a very personal question for
students
. Both of these have benefits and drawbacks that have to be considered by many people
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