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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback

#students #study #colleges #universities #country #drawback
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, it has become a prevalent phenomenon that many people decide to
studying
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 out of
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 home town, thanks to the advancement of technology and transportation under
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globalization
gloabalization
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globalisation
. I believe that
benefits
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 of
this
 trend are outweighed by its disadvantages. On the one hand, one of the most significant advantages of
this
 development is that
students
 can learn more language during
this
 period.
Moreover
,
students
 can
made
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 friends
who
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from
the
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other countries.
Consequently
, It allows them to be more sociality and confident to talk
with
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in
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 other
language
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languages
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 and become more native in
this
. It is likely that a student uses English when that person
studied
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studies
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at
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 The United Kingdom, it will lead that person to intend to use
this
 language to communicate with
other
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others
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. It made the oversea
students
 more
sactisfy
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satisfy
 and confident to use
another languages
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another language
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.
On the other hand
, there are significant disadvantages of
students
 will be far away from their
hometown
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 and families. Probably the
first
 idea popping in mind is that it means that
students
 who
studying
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out
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outside
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 of their home town,
they
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need to be independent.
Nevertheless
, we have
a
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developed transport it made people more convenient to travelling. In Additional,
by
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 the leap in information technology, there are many social media
can
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that can
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 easier to contact and make
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video
vedio
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call
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 with families or friends. I would
therefore
 agree that
although
 there are
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of
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to
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 the current trend
to
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of
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 going to
other country
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another country
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 for studying, they are outweighed by the benefits. It can enrich people's experience
another
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of another
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 region's culture and
also
 make more foreign friends.
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