Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festival; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?.

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These days,

festivals

are held and celebrated without actually knowing the meaning or intentions

behind

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. They are set up mainly because they are something

people

occasionally do. I partially agree with the statement that

People

focus on enjoying themselves, but hardly remembered the values and meaning of those traditions with my reasons explained in

this

essay.

To begin

with, traditional or religious

festivals

are

passing

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on to generations through actions and teachings.

People

tend to follow their predecessors,

thus

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and thus

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celebrate and hold

festivals

. They not only know when to celebrate but

also

why they are important to their backgrounds.

For instance

Songran

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Songkran

day, a traditional festival, that allows individuals to enjoy splashing water,

also

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a special occasion for the descendants to pay respect to both their living and deceased ancestors. Almost every

thai

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Thai

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people

know the values and reasons behind

this

festive occasion because we were taught since we were young.

Moreover

, when it comes to Buddhist

clebrations

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celebrations

, many

buddhists

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Buddhists

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realize the importance. Visakha

bucha

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day represents the birth date, enlightenment day and death date of the Buddha.

However

, there are

festivals

celebrated that

meanings

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meaning

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are forgotten.

This

is because the focus has been on the excitement and fun rather than

the

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history and origin of them. Phi Ta Khon, a local Thai festival

that is

celebrated annually hardly been recognized

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for

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its true meaning for allowing auspicious circumstances to occur. In summary, being forgotten for its own value or not hugely depend on the public. If they pay attention to roots, the history and meaning will remain and keep on living.

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