In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a fact that nowadays people get older in the early stage of their life

due to

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severe illness or any medical conditions, which may affect the budget of the

healthcare

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system. But I fully disagree with

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notion that the community has to pay their own expenses for their well-being. First of ,all it is worth considering that there

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a number of families who

are

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live below the poverty line

as a result

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they cannot afford household expenses. How ministry can expect from public to pay for its own

healthcare

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expenses? Let's take the example,

according to

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the statistical data published in 2020 in the Times of India, India has more than seventy per cent population who live below the poverty line and do not get the proper amount of food.

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to that if people

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start paying their own medical bills as resulted authorities will lose all

control

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of the

healthcare

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system.

This

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further

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creates lots more problems like inflation in the medical industry. Not only

this

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but it is worth considering that only Government can take significant measures to

control

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major illnesses like COVID-19 and malaria.

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, the ministry can open various Gym and Yoga centres to

control

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the ageing population. In conclusion, me Government should pay for the community's

healthcare

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facilities, not only because they are living under the poverty line, it is because the Government can keep track

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of and

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control

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the various major

illness

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illnesses

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with the help of worldwide

healthcare

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funds.

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Task Response

Your essay does not fully address the task. It is important to carefully consider both the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and present clear arguments and examples to support your position. You need to provide a balanced view that fully addresses the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your essay demonstrates some coherence and cohesion through the use of transitional phrases and some signposting of ideas. However, there are instances of repetitive language, and the flow of ideas could be improved for better clarity and organization.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

250 words

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