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Some people argue that public transportation should be made completely free of charge. Are there more advantages over disadvantages of this decision?

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Public transportation should be free of charge in
few
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people
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 opinion.
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transport
 is
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 simple and easy way for
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 to commute.
This
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advantages
 over disadvantages of public
transport
 available to
public
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the public
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 at no cost. To start with,
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there
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 are several
advantages
 if
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public
transport
 is made free for residents living in
city
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the city
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. The major
advantages
 are pollution will decrease, road accidents will reduce and no need to worry about parking
area
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 and traffic infringements .
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, if an individual is using
an public
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public transport
a means of public transport
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transport
 to commute to
an
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 fro from work he is causing less pollution to the environment
,
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 because he travels by public
transport
, he
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 need to worry about road safety. As he doesn’t have his own
transport
, he
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 to think about parking area tickets and traffic penalties Overall, there are other benefits which can help the government and the individuals if the public
transport
 is
cost free
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cost-free
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. On the other end, there are
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 disadvantages if
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public
transport
 is made free; to mention a few are taxes from
people
 will reduce, demands from
people
 in regards to transportation will rise, public transportation gets crowded during the peak hours which may lead to theft and might lead to missing small children and old
people
. As discussed in the
above mentioned
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 paragraphs, there are more
advantages
 if the public can use city
transport
 at zero cost as the
majors
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 concerns of pollution and road safety will reduce and help us to live in a greener and healthier environment.
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