There has been more and more mass shooting, especially in schools. Some people think that the best way to solve this problem is to provide the ability of possessing gun to the teacher, while others argue that this will be the start of more violence. To what extent do you agree?

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been huge numbers of mass shootings, in schools

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. One can safely assume that the best way to solve the problem is

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teacher

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a teacher

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can possess the

gun

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, while others argue that

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will be the beginning of more violence. I agree with

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view. Admittedly,

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possessibility

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the teacher

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is hardly the most appropriate solution to solve

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problem. As the role of a

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is teaching and taking their students to heights.

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, certain teachers lacking

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responsibility may pose certain problems.

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, possessing

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of a

teacher

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will serve as a bad role model to children.

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, there will be

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those around the

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owner. A good illustration of

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teacher

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shoots somebody

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of protecting them.

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, lacking

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attention from executives

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learning

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environment may put them in more trouble about security since it is opined

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no one will start

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violence in school.

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, every school should have

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guard that has

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gun

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and have been trained about using

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and safety to provide

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of parents and individuals. To conclude, providing

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a gun

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gun

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the teacher

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teacher

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isn’t solving the mass shooting in

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the school

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school

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, the presence of

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a gun

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learning

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the learning

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environment

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may lead to cases that shouldn’t happen.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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There has been more and more mass shooting, especially in schools. Some people think that the best way to solve this problem is to provide the ability of possessing gun to the teacher, while others argue that this will be the start of more violence. To what extent do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

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It is thought by some that a school teachers role is to motivate and inspire students. However, other people believe that a teachers primary role is to pass on knowledge . What do you think is the role of a teacher?

104.In some culture, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try har enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

With the development of modern society is the loss of traditional ways of life. Is it important to keep our traditional ways of life? How can this be achieved?