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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large amount of toys?

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In the busy life nowadays, parents do not always get to play with their
children
. In order to solve the problem,
children
 are provided with a significant amount of
toys
 to keep them accompanied.
However
, while keeping themselves entertained all the time,
this
 can eventually
results
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 in them being overweight. One of the essential advantages of giving young ones
toys
 to play with is that they would not get bored and can play with their choice according to their mood and taste.
Beside
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, playing with different kinds of treats can develop skills like problem-solving and organization, both being extremely beneficial for the child in the near future.
On the other hand
, supplying offspring with a large sum of
toys
 will lead them to be
overload
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.
For instance
,
the
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toys
 which are popular among
children
,
such
 as LEGO, are played
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indoor
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, which reduces their physical activity to a great extent.
Moreover
, having a huge number of
toys
 makes
children
 undervalue them,
therefore
, making them obese and not helping them realise their worth. All in all,
although
 giving them
enormous
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figure
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 of trinkets will help them in improving various skills, parents should cut down on the number.
Furthermore
, parents should try to motivate their
children
 to increase their physical activity
even more
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 to save them from becoming obsessive.
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