Some people think that media should not report detail of crimes to the public. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that the news shouldn't share details of the crimes, while some
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thinks they should. While being properly informed about the events around us is important,
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sensitive
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to
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might cause
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in crime and violence. We are living in the
information
age and getting the right
information
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the
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crimes
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essential for
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to be informed and to be safe.
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, having reliable news becomes harder
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due to social media.Today, fake news and wrong
information
can spread rapidly.
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the reason many
people
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that
media
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should report all details
,
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so that they
informed
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correctly
instead
of believing the wrong things.
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, without the crime details
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people
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can face attacks on social media with false accusations. Even
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they have logical reasons to support
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idea , I disagree with
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good
information
, in bad
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can be
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harmful
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harmful
.
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is why
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of
people
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that publishing
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sensitive
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of
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crime might cause more violence.
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it might be attractive to
people
with bad intentions or worst it might give them
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the idea
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to create
a similar acts
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.
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, in past years, after a man burned a young girl in my city, there
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been
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in similar way murders very rapidly. Because of the
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it might cause, I believe not all
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shared with
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. To conclude,
although
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the bad actions around us
essential
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, I strongly believe that, there should be some filtration about how much of the
information
public should get.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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