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Now a days they way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.In what ways has technology effected the types of relationship people make.Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,
technology
 has altered the manner many people keep in touch with one another. Thanks to developing
technology
, from now on, distance does not matter in communication among people. For
this
 reason,
this
 essay will focus positive effects of
technology
 on interaction.
Firstly
, in many ways, societies do not want to lose touch with someone who is relatives, family members or workmates. Since
this
 is a result stemming from being a person and as well as
this
 is a necessity in order to keep on healthy relation to them. For these reasons, prior to
technology
, people who miss friends needed to either meet them or write a letter which is full of emotions.
However
, today, everyone can reach someone else by touching just one button without any effort,
thus
 there is no matter regarding distance.
Secondly
, in today's work environment, everyone may have a job ,not only in a company located in their home country but
also
 they may apply to whole firms in the entire world as a remote worker. Before
then
, someone looking for a job had to move their homes to developed cities in terms of industries but now, they can do their work and
also
 make a meeting with workmates by using some applications or pc programs,
such
 as Zoom or Whatsapp, because of technological developments. According to my experience being a remote worker is that I can earn much more money by working for a foreign company and I have not even moved. In conclusion,
technology
 has provided contact with acquaintances easier than past and has given opportunities to reach everywhere worldwide.
Submitted by Oğuzhan Balcı on

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