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Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a common belief that leadership is given by nature.
Although
 some others defend that you can train to be one. Even though many traits of successful leaders are common and considered genetic,
this
 thesis argues that with the help of the recent findings of psychology, anyone can learn to lead. To some
people
, leading should be in your blood. I believe that's because many famous leaders share similar qualities,
such
 as a strong tone of voice, charisma, and high self-esteem.
This
 creates the belief that by combining all these ingredients, everyone can easily influence crowds.
For example
, many political leaders,
such
 as Barack Obama or Tayyip Erdogan, create an image of a strong, capable man only with their speeches.
Although
,
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 indeed, you can not learn charisma, I disagree with
this
 opinion. The reason that today there are lots of self-improvement books in the market is that many
people
 believe with the proper education, we can develop any skills we want. And leading
people
 is one of the most popular amongst them. The improved technology and recent research projects around human psychology provided more information than ever.
For example
,
people
 think that emotional intelligence is much more important than cognitive intelligence in the workspace. There are numerous scientific research projects, displaying evidence to show that even introverts can lead through understanding and directing the needs of themselves and the ones around them.
That is
 why I believe leading
people
 is deeply related to understanding the human mind and can be learned and adopted as a skill. To conclude, even though the general opinion says that you are born to lead, in my opinion, anyone willing to give some effort to learn the required skills can thrive as a leader.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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