Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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importance for
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as for children or not
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is the subject of the following essay. In my point of
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this
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statement is true for the reasons listened below.
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, it is reasonable to assume that
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gaming is
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global business. As a
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billionaire
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gaming can't limit
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target to just one part of
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society, it must be as largest as possible.
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is the main reason why
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industry produce
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for all type of consumer, no matter
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age.
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, over the past ten years developed an international circuit of online tournaments.
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phenomenon
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leads always more people of all ages, starting
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games
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the  e-sports,
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online competition where the teams are made up of teenagers as well as
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in their thirties or
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forties
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but not the least, children and
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have a lot of passions in common. The difference between their daily schedule is due to the fact that
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much more responsibilities to attend
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, let's think about the
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time of
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, their use it to do the
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think
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done
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children
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children
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as playing a sport, hang out with friends and arguably play
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. In conclusion, after considerating all the
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made above, I think that it is true to say that there is not a range of age needed to be addicted to
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. Gaming as
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some way of food or sport
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is
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global and
crossovering
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crossover
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interest.
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