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Appearance isn’t everything ?  Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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One
 of the most important
trend
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 in today’s world is the sudden upsurge that
appearance
 plays a dominant role which takes the direction of widespread worry leading to a myriad of concerns in the world.
This
 essay will demonstrate the positive and the negative aspects which
relates
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 to
appearance
 using a pragmatic approach. To commence with there are several arguments in favour of my stance and the most important
one
 is the type of occasion where
appearance
 is considered. In fact, people will judge your status upon your presentation. For an instance, you go to a marriage function at a
seven star
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 hotel in beach shorts,
sleeveless
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a sleeveless
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 T-shirt with a pair of slippers and
hat
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a hat
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. The attendees at the event would judge your social grooming manners and poor dressing sense. In short,
one
 has to decide about
appearance
on
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according to the occasion
..
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 Another crucial factor in the aforementioned statement is that
appearance
 does not matter when deciding a character of a person. As told by an English Author “ You cannot judge a person by their looks “. As
an
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evidence, a
shoe maker
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shoemaker
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 can turn into a president of a country. Abraham Lincoln who was the 16th president of
USA
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the USA
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 was once a cobbler and his looks did not stop him
in
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 becoming a president. Overall,
appearance
 does not count in all situations especially when an individual wants to achieve their goal.
Lastly
, in my opinion, the
appearance
is depends
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 upon the occasion you are
involving
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 in.
One
 cannot decide a
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person’s
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person’
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person's
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 character based on his looks and style.
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