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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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To save endangered
animals
 and species we should spend a huge amount of
money
 while some people think spending
money
 on
such
 things as
that is
 only a waste. I believe we and government should do whatever we can to save rare and epic
animals
 from danger.
Firstly
, protecting every species in the world is mandatory for each country, because if one of them is completely removed from the Earth, the
food
 cycle will be damaged. It means, that
animals
 in the jungle need each other to stay alive,
also
this
 will cause various problems to our life and other
animals
.
For example
, if we do not spend our
money
 to protect cows and feed them, most of the cows will die, and
as a result
, humans and some
animals
such
 as wolfs will lose part of their
food
 supplies.
Therefore
, in the
food
 cycle, one animal is prey and the other one is the hunter so they need each other to stay alive.
In addition
, spending
money
 on endangered
animals
 is similar to investing in ourselves benefits, because while
animals
 live in
nature
 they will keep it safe and alive. It means, we can have amazing jungles and natural fields with only protecting
animals
.
For instance
, bees are the main reason why flowers and trees are starting to grow because while they move around they will distribute other plants' seeds in
nature
. Ergo, we should use our
money
 to protect bees and other
animals
,
as a result
, we can have beautiful
nature
. To conclude, spending
money
 on protecting endangered
animals
 is not a waste of
money
, with
this
 action we help to keep our
nature
 green and we can use
animals
' benefits when they are still in the
food
 cycle.
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