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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels?

Presently, the whole world mainly depends on non-renewable sources for obtaining energy requirements which
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 for industries and transport.
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,there will come a time when we can not
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 fossil fuels
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 not having sufficient amounts for essential activities.
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 essay will discuss the methods
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 as reducing excess usage and different
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 sources we can adopt in future. Many people
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 cars even for short-distance travel without considering the scarcity of fuel.
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, it is the responsibility of all of us to minimize the usage of fuel by using alternative methods of transportation.
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, if all of us walk a short distance and utilize public transport mainly for day-to-day requirements we can save energy.
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, if we can
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 a group transport facility
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 of using an individual vehicle we may be able to protect these resources for
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 years efficiently. Minimizing usage can be done up to some extent
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, finding different energy resources is essential to overcome future issues.Most governments encourage their industries to
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 wind
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, solar
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 and sea waves to generate electricity by giving special tax concessions
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. For ,example Sri Lankan government has declared tax concession for constructing wind
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 electricity generation plans and importing solar panels.
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, an increasing number of hydropower generation plants will bring solutions for generating electricity in
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 term. In conclusion, even though fossil fuels are mostly used for
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 generation and transportation actions should be taken to minimize utilization and find effective and efficient ways to
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 these depleting resources in the long run
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 finding alternative methods.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is logically connected to the next, creating a smooth flow of ideas throughout the essay. Additionally, consider using transition words and phrases to guide the reader through the essay.
task response
Provide a more thorough response to the essay prompt by discussing specific strategies and policies that can be implemented to conserve fossil fuels. Include more detailed examples to support the points made, and ensure that each paragraph contributes directly to the overall task response.
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