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Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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Some
people
 suggest that young
people
 should take a
job
 for some years between
school
 and
university
.
Although
 there are some gains from working in gap years, I believe that the drawbacks often
outweighs
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 any gains. On the one hand, there are several reasons to support high
school
students
 to
work
 before universities.
First
 of all, the young are anxious to achieve quick success and get instant benefits. They think they can become successful easily.
Furthermore
, they consider that they are well-educated and mature enough to
work
 in
the
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society without
university
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a university
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 education. What's more, they think working before
university
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the university
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 can develop their skills.
On the other hand
, in my eyes, high
school
students
 are too young to
work
 in
the
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society. They don’t have enough experience and professional skills for
job
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. There are
also
 some
evidents
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evidence
events
 that support
people
 to go to apply academy immediately after they graduate from
school
.
Firstly
, research shows
people
 can learn fast when they are between seventeen and twenty-five years old.
Students
 are supposed to learn professional knowledge and develop their ability to
work
 in
the
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educational institution
instead
 of working immediately after high
school
. What’s more,
students
 who study in
applying
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 college after high
school
 coherently are able to focus on studying without the interference of trivial matters in life.
Last
 but not least, a
university
 education is a stepping stone to a good
job
. Companies take college diplomas seriously, and individuals with professional
certification
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 can hardly get any
job
. In conclusion, I think the
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youngest
youngst
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young
 shouldn’t take a position between high
school
student
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students
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 and
university
student
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students
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. They are supposed to study at the academy coherently.
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