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Some people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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It is considered by some that rising tax on different industries leads to lower exhaust fumes and emissions, while there are others who think that the problem can be tackled
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 other ways. Increasing the mandatory amount of money which factories pay May result in them being less productive and other approaches to pollution problems might not be largely efficient, but I firmly believe that alternative ways would be a better choice. Apparently, a wide range of businesses pay large amounts of money as taxes annually, which has inclined them to set lesser salaries for the workforce and
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 produce not high-quality products.
Although
 forcing industries to pay more tax may decline the pollution made by them, it would lower
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job satisfaction
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 workers.Like what happened in India after people started receiving lower salaries. considering other approaches
such
 as giving more benefits to the companies which do not pass the limits of producing emissions or to the ones that build parks seems more appealing to people.
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 will encourage industries to cause less pollution and earn the benefits,
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 environmental issues.
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Netherlands
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 some factories started building parks in order to avoid environmental problems and after years they even had more
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 in the country. To conclude, by taking into account that increasing taxes puts more strain on the workforce and
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 of alternative ways, I strongly believe in making use of other options.
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