Some people think that spending a lot of money on wedding parties and other celebrations is just a waste. Others, however, think that such events are necessary, so spending money on them is acceptable. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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all families. Some people consider that wasting much
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believe that it is meaningful to spend
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terms of the positive side, there is a belief that
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essential. The main reason given to support
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considered as from the countries
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, others
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completely
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believe that weast
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parties
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of food and water.
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such
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they will
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life is unfair.
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increase more than before. to sum up,
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spending a
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on wedding
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and other celebrations is just a waste, spending
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is acceptable. I believe that it is
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to spend
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that
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extravagant
  • waste of money
  • financial burden
  • priorities
  • materialistic values
  • unrealistic expectations
  • special occasion
  • celebration
  • strengthening relationships
  • social bonds
  • boosting local economies
  • creating jobs
  • lasting memories
  • financial responsibility
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