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Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent you agree?

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Groups of
people
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 around the
world
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 think social
media
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 apps and websites
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 as Instagram and Facebook had an abysmal result on communities and humans individually.
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, there are many positive and negative impacts of social
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 as you will see I talked about them in
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 essay. On the one hand, when you spend too much of your
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 on these types of apps only because you are bored, your
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 has been used uselessly.
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, while you spend your
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 there, lots of
people
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 worldwide are communicating in person and increasing their social skills which you do not.
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, TikTok is a social networking app for
people
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 around the
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 to share their videos there which is not helpful for us to use because while we spend our
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 in an unhelpful way
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 our communication skills will not improve.
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, applications like
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 are always lurking to hunt our
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 and attention.
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, applications
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 as Facebook helped us share our ideas with
people
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 around the
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.
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, users can be aware of other humans’ news and their experience.
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, in applications
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 as Pinterest, artists around the
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 can share their artworks and they can find new ideas there which is very helpful.
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, social
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 and networks are positive tools if you use them correctly. In conclusion, each person and group of
people
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 should be aware of the negative impact can social
media
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 apps do on their life and learn how to use them in a luminary way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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