Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many students upon completion of their studies contend that their unable to find an occupation relevant to their chosen field. In my opinion,
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is a major issue for the students as they become unemployed after they are out of university.
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of foremost, after school examinations many students fail to research the trending occupations relevant to each industry without receiving or gathering more information regarding the preferred job,
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they choose the wrong path. Evidence in
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matter, an individual who completed her studies in Civil Engineering, has no job opportunities in Sri Lanka. The rationale behind
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is that the chosen occupation is mainly on demand for males than females.
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intends to attend university to obtain another qualification for a job
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as a marketing course, as certain employers focus on marketing qualifications which
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consumes time to complete a course. As a solution to the stated issue, in my point of view prior to enrolling on a program best option for the individual is to do research on the preferred field.
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matter is an internship, which helps the student to pursue his/ her chosen career
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extend their career and gain the required experience.
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will encourage and fascinate the individual to do the best of his/ her ability without facing any problems. In conclusion, as far as I am concerned the above solution can be measured accurately which
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will be less challenging for the student to face unemployment in the future when applying for jobs, without any hesitation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate job placement
  • current job market trends
  • practical experience
  • job openings
  • employment prospects
  • geographical barriers
  • automation and technological advances
  • economic conditions
  • mismatch between education and job market demands
  • over-saturation
  • theoretical knowledge
  • competitive job market
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