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Nowadays people are moving to urban areas from rural areas what are the reason and what problem can cause

#people #areas #reason
In the present situation, the increasing number of
people
 who live in the
city
have
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 never been
remarkable
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 than now. The urban areas have appealed
numerous
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to numerous
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 individuals
with
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for
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 several reasons and as living in those
places
 became a trend,
however
, a myriad of problems have
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arisen
arised
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 as
it
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will be mentioned below. At the outset, there
are
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pool
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 of reasons why living in the
city
 has
became
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 a
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popular
popluar
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popular
 trend among
people
.
Firstly
, it is
undeliable
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undeniable
unreliable
 the fact that famous facilities and cutting-edge
entermainments
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entertainment
entertainments
 are built and located in the
city
 centre. To be more specific, it is safe to conclude that in the rural area, there are few
places
 to enjoy
such
 entertainments, which can be easily seen in the
city
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such
sush
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such
 as theatres. Another point worth mentioning is that not only
rich
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 education system but
also
the
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 compelling job market can be found in
the
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urban
places
.
For example
, companies which are hard not to know as Google and Samsung are all located in the capital
city
 of those countries, by which I mean, most of the famous firms are in the
city
 centre and so as to get
in
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into
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 those large
company
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companies
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, individuals are likely to move from their small town to the large cities.
However
,
this
 phenomenon mentioned above has
exert
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 tonnes of adverse impacts
to
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on
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 not only
the
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 country itself but
also
to
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 the citizens. Given that the number of
people
 increased
in particular
 cities, it means that the
people
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 in rural areas have decreased, which will cause serious problems in the lack of
employments
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employment
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.
This
 will
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the development of those areas in the long term, and the
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country
coountry
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country
 will witness a severe
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gap
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gab
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gap
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 between
city
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the city
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 and the rural
places
. When it comes to the citizens by the
skyroaket
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skyrocket
 of cars, they will face a serious traffic
congunction
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conjunction
, and
also
 live in a place where it is full of carbon and sulfur dioxide, which means a place with poor air quality. In conclusion, because of
pool
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 of attractive perks when living in the
city
, numerous publics are now likely to reside in the
city
, which caused
an unexpected negative impacts
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to
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 the country. I strongly believe that the
governments
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has
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 to cope with these causing problems in advance before it gets more severe to handle.
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