Many people say that we now live in 'consumer societies' where money and possessions are given too much importance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the midst of

this

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world,most folks think that,as we all are living in the 21st century.

people

are more

intended

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about social

status

and finance. I completely agree with the notion.

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essay will elucidate the viewpoint in the coming paragraph and illustrate the examples from my personal experience. Let's begin with the past decades, The peoples in the past generations

are

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very affectionate to their families and society and

also

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they

don't

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need to get back something from

others

if ,they

do

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some

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helps

others

.But these decades humans help

others

for something

benefits

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to

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return

back

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such

as money or any publicity.Apparently, in front of the public , they help

others

but in the

,

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backend they

targeted

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their exposure .

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, in the

last

few years back my home country

had

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affect

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by some natural disasters.

This

time numerous organizations and individuals came forward to help those

people

in

this

situation.

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I felt that someone in

this

group has done some things for their socioeconomic

status

.

That is

,they need some publicity from

this

news behind .

As a result

, they have to get good advertisements for their business for their future success. As a

,

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result I thought that

people

are changed a lot from past years to these decades From

this

generation, Teenagers mostly prefer to maintain friendships with high social

status

people

,

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we think

that

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Why are they

following

this

tendency? Because of

this

modernized world, young generations have given importance to money and economic

status

.

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, They thought ,If they

continue

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relationships with high-

status

society

people

,

then

they have to earn something from it.

For instance

,

Last

year I visited one school for some survey-related work. I saw, that one student was sitting alone and he had no friends to play with or anything. I asked him what is the reason

?

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He told me that he came from a coastal area and his father is a fisherman. Because of that ,None of them

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with that student. And

also

surprised that he was the rank holder in that school at that time.

To conclude

, Today's world gives more importance to wealth and high-rated social standards . They do not even think about family relations or anything . I completely agree with the viewpoint.