Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the numbers of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Health is Wealth and everyone should take care of
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if we have more
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facilities
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public health will improve or other measures required to make it effective. In my ,opinion how the increasing the number of
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facilities
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help alone if extra measures are not taken?
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It will be definitely good to have more
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as if if we don'
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have the option to play
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join or play. for ,example
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was not able to enrol my daughter on soccer as all the
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are full. but despite having so many
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if some are not joining
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it will be a waste of public taxation money.
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, I believe that public awareness is
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required about these
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. if they don'
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know they won'
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go. Awareness could be about how to play those
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, their rules and regulations. when centres are open their detailed timings . To
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, increasing
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facilities
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is important but it is more important to raise public awareness of these
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so that the general public can enjoy these activities .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • inclusive fitness
  • public health campaigns
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative health measures
  • health infrastructure
  • wellness initiatives
  • nutritional education
  • health-conscious
  • behavioural change
  • motivational outreach
  • physical wellbeing
  • cross-sectional collaboration
  • government subsidies
  • public health policy
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