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Many elderly are no long looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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These days, a lot of senior citizens are placed in old age
homes
instead
 of being taken
care
by
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of by
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 their family members.
This
 essay will discuss
merits
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the merits
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 and demerits of
this
 trend.
Firstly
, sending
elderly
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the elderly
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 to nursing
homes
 and
care
 home is advantageous for their
families
 because they are relieved from the burden of their elders’ medical
care
. These centres are well equipped and know how to deal with the needs of the elderly as well as
reacting
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 appropriately in case of any emergency.
In contrast
,
families
 of these old
people
 are rarely trained and not equipped with knowledge in case any mishap occurs.
Secondly
, it is beneficial for senior
people
 as well because they do not feel unwanted and left out at home. When they are placed in retirement
homes
 they get a chance to socialise themselves with other
people
 of their age group. A crucial downside to putting elder members of
families
 in
care
homes
 or nursing
homes
 is that children in those
families
 lack traditional and moral values. Nowadays, both parents are working, and they do not have
ample
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 amount of time to spend with their children and impart
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them
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 knowledge about good and bad behaviour. Grandparents not only play an instrumental role to pass down the knowledge of one’s family traditions and cultures to their grandparents but they
also
 make them learn the basic principles of mankind.
Also
, peoples’
life
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become
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 more struggling because they remain deprived of the support which elder
people
 of a
family
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families
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 can provide in their
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day-to-day
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day –to-day
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day–to–day
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 life. As per a survey in India, all 8 out of 10
families
 where elders are living
along
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alone
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 are spending a more relaxed and happy life than those where elders are not staying with. In conclusion, while
young
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the young
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 generation is free from the worries of their elder
peoples’
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people’s
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 medical
care
,
this
 trend
also
 has a negative impact on grandchildren’s rearing and
everyday
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the everyday
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 lives of
current
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the current
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 generation.
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