Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

There are those who
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the
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belief
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teachers at school should not give home assignments to students, while other think that
homework
is an essential way to improve young
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education. In the following
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both views
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this
topic will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one side of the
argument
, there are a variety of reasons why
school
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schools
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should not give home study tasks to
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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. The main reason to consider
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that if
student
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have
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no
homework
to do, they will have more free time to do other activities.
For example
, playing sports, drawing, and playing computer
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which can reduce
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from
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class at school.
Moreover
, a
further
aspect of
this
argument
is that some activities especially playing sports can increase happiness, improve social
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and good
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with their friends.
On the other hand
, some opponents may argue that
homework
is a crucial way to improve
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skills. One of the obvious reasons is that doing
homework
after class
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help
student
to review lessons.
In addition
, the high scores are taken by
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a lot of assignments.
For instance
, if
student
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students
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need
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to
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at math, they should
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frequently practice
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math equations.
Furthermore
,
homework
is increased good
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with their family because parents or siblings can teach young people to solve
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difficult assignment. Having considered both sides of the
argument
, it seems to me that both views of the
argument
have their merits.
However
, on balance I personally believe that young people should allocate time to do
homework
and do other activities equally. Doing so can improve education skills and decrease stress in the present and in the future life.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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