Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

There are those who
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teachers at school should not give home assignments to pupils, while other think that
homework
is an essential way to improve young
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education. In the following paragraphs, both views
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topic will be discussed in detail before my opinion is reached. On the one side of the
argument
, there are a variety of reasons why
school
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should not give home study tasks to
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student
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. The main reason to consider
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that if
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no
homework
to do, they will have more leisure time to do other activities.
For example
, doing some hobbies, drawing pictures, or playing computer games which of these can reduce the tension from class.
Moreover
, a
further
aspect of
this
argument
is that some activities especially playing sports can increase happiness, social skill,
team
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works
skills
and good
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with their friends.
On the other hand
, some opponents may argue that doing
homework
is a crucial way to improve their education
skills
. One of the obvious reasons is that doing
homework
after class can help students to review lessons and enhance their
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.
In addition
, the high scores are taken by doing a lot of
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.
For instance
, if students need to
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at math
skills
, they should practice solving math equations regularly.
Furthermore
,
homework
also
can increase good relationships between students and their
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because parents or siblings can guide them to resolve difficult assignments. Having considered both sides of the
argument
, it seems to me that both views of the
argument
have their merits.
However
, on balance I personally believe that young people should allocate time to do
homework
and do other activities equally. Doing so can improve education
skills
and decrease stress in the present and in the future life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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