You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter: Describe the problem you had with the tickets Say why were unhappy with the staff Suggest what action the train company should take

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my disappointment with your services
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after I had a bad experience with your staff. Let me explain my situation. I bought business class tickets for my journey from Los Anglos to New York before a week from the trip, when I arrived to the gate the employee said that I can't enter trough the business gate because my ticket is old and their are some changes on the policy about
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manner, as I mentioned I purchased my tickets before one week. The staff were very impolite and they refused to talk to me, I wanted to explain my problem, but they closed the door and I couldn't catch the train. I am kindly requesting a refund for my fee that I paid, and I expect an apology for the treatment that I received from the workers there. Thank you for your consideration. Best regards, Lamar

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Make sure to start the letter with a proper greeting and include more details about your experience to fully explain the problem.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphs, where each paragraph has only one main idea. This will help the reader understand your points easily.
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Try to be more polite in your request and add a closing statement to show appreciation.
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You described your problem with the tickets clearly, which is good for understanding the issue.
coherence and cohesion
You used a polite closing, which is important in formal letters.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • disappointed
  • inconvenience
  • frustrated
  • incompetent
  • unhelpful
  • inconsiderate
  • ruined
  • compensation
  • refund
  • apology
  • reimbursement
  • improvement
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