A person's worth nowadays seems to judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned value, such as honour, kindness, and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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On the other hand
, Some old-fashioned values are much more important than money. Linking Words
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to mimic in future, it is important for adults to educate their children about these positive values because they still play an essential part in the societies.
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