A person's worth nowadays seems to judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned value, such as honour, kindness, and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Undeniable that

people

at present are judged based on social position and personal abundance, traditional

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cultures

such

as integrity and humanity are being forgotten. To a certain extent, I would agree with the fact that

people

are valued based on their riches and condition these days, but I

also

believe that old-cultured still play an important part in our societies.

First

of all, we are living in the pop culture and materialistic era these days, as the public judge each individual based on how wealthy

people

.

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It can be seen from how celebrities become famous nowadays. Many celebrities are

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popular because of their physical appearance. One of the examples would be Paris Hilton.

Although

she has many bad attitudes, she is still popular because she inherits the assets of her parents. It seems that most

of

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people

want to have more money to live

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rich

people

.

On the other hand

, Some old-fashioned values are much more important than money.

This

is because no one can undermine a gold heart and it is rarer than just a coin.

For example

, the individual who

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volunteers

such

as fire fighting and animal saving foundation.

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good role

model

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to mimic in future, it is important for adults to educate their children about these positive values because they still play an essential part in the societies. In conclusion, even though

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judged based on their wealth and social status nowadays, I do believe that old-fashioned values

such

as honour, respect and trust cannot be eliminated from our daily lives.

Therefore

we must teach our young generation about these cultures, in order for them to survive and succeed in the future.