Some people believe that children should do what their parents tell them to do; others think children must learn to think for themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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will always become a hot topic in
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society that should we give
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generation liberty to do whatever they want. A portion of the community
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their
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caretakers
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have full right to control over their lives while
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and I believe, they ought to understand the importance of
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the independence
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of
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thoughts and emotions. Both
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views are elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs of
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controlabilty
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controllability
of guardians on their children's
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. They think that
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they
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they
are not mature enough so they can easily
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by
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unethical people or even
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indulge themselves in illegal activities because they are not well known about the consequences. That's why they need to
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them. Another valuable point for
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is,
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are their
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well
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wishers and they always want to provide
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life
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them
even
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support them whenever they need like when a person is going through from hard time their
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care takers
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always stand with him and conceal
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motivational stories.
On the other hand
, some support the practical approach as they opine boldness
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the confidence level of a person which is a key component to
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success in
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life
. Apart from
this
, freedom provides a great exposure of knowledge to them regarding every
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of
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life
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Consequently
, their instant reaction capability is improved and bravely they will cope
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with any kind of situation. According to a finding, to exemplify,
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a youngster
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youngster
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who
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their own decisions are bliss with great
problem solving
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skills. In conclusion, both the approaches have their own significance in young people's
life
journey but
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completely go with the latter idea as with
this
they become courageous as well as learn about numerous prospectives of
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obey
  • authority
  • guidance
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • mistakes
  • independent
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • problem-solving
  • responsibility
  • self-reliance
  • opinion
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