Some people believe that children should do what their parents tell them to do; others think children must learn to think for themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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have full right to control over their lives while

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and I believe, they ought to understand the importance of

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thoughts and emotions. Both

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views are elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs of

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unethical people or even

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indulge themselves in illegal activities because they are not well known about the consequences. That's why they need to

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them. Another valuable point for

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support them whenever they need like when a person is going through from hard time their

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who

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their own decisions are bliss with great

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skills. In conclusion, both the approaches have their own significance in young people's

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completely go with the latter idea as with

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