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Some people say that phones should be banned from secondary schools. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

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Some individuals say that telephones should be banned
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from
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from
 secondary schools. I totally agree with
this
 opinion. In
this
 essay, I will give reasons why I fully agree with it. Some people indicate that
phones
 should be banned from junior high schools because
their
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disavantages
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disadvantages
. It is true that we should not underestimate the dark side of
cell
phones
.
Firstly
, some
students
 can use
phones
 in
class
 to help them cheat. For a realistic example, a major study of U.S
students
 showed that more than 35
percent
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 of teenagers said they had used a
cell
 phone to cheat in
class
.
Secondly
, when
phones
 are used in
class
,
students
 without them can feel left out.
Students
 who don't have it cannot fully participate in
class
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 or
being
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 teased for being different.
For instance
, a teen
cannot
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 afford that device will be picked on by his peers because he is different.
Lastly
, allowing
phones
 in classes can keep
students
 from staying focused in
class
. A
cell
 phone can not only distract the person using it but
also
 the people around them. It is true that if a
cell
 phone rings or
make
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 other noises in
class
, it can distract the
class
. In conclusion, some people say that
phones
 should be banned from secondary schools. I totally agree with
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this
thiis
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this
 because I believe that
phones
 can cause distraction and other problems in
class
. I recommend that parents should consider
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 and have an informed opinion before letting their offspring use
phones
 in
class
.
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