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some believe that children should be taught from a young age how to handle money. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There are individuals who believe that handling cash should be taught when they were young. In my opinion, teaching offspring how to spend
money
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 is the way that makes them more mature and helps them avoid problems in their forthcoming. One of the reasons why
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 support the idea of giving
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money
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, despite the fact that giving
children
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money
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 may contain possible issues
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 as they may be involved in crimes like being robbed or stealing
money
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, those still can be solved by teaching them the way to react when dealing with possible problems that may happen in both present and prospective,
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, it may give the experience to overcome the following challenges.
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, when it comes to a student whose graduation is coming near, he or she may have to deal with many problems in the future
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 as being married and spending
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 on many projects or personal life and demand or saving the
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 which may not be taught at schools but their
parents
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 who have many experiences that have been saved for years. Another reason for my opinion, not only helping
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 prepare for the future but
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 teaching them the value of cash and being hard work.
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 is because
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 is not always available to be gained for free like what
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 do for their
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 but they have to work hard to earn it.
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,
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 will teach themselves lessons about how valuable
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 and being hardworking is and
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 form a saving habit to support themselves and their
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.
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,
children
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 in Asia are taught to open a small shop that sells stuff
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 not in use or juices and
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 will let them spend their earned
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 to buy whatever they choose to buy and their
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 will help them sort out the unnecessary items,
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 may help them gain more knowledge of what they should buy or not. In conclusion, some individuals think that helping the little ones manage their
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. I believe that teaching
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 the importance of handling funds effectively will provide them with the knowledge of managing funds as well as the value of
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