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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Advertising is
one
 of the most used methods of introducing products to us
customers
 and persuading us to purchase their
product
, but many suggest that
this
method
 is no longer effective, since people nowadays neglect most of the advert. If advertising is truly unreliable, why does the company still use them? Advertising is commonly used by entrepreneurs who wanted to introduce their products to
customers
 and offer information about their products. Advertising plays an essential role of establish
customers
' interest in the goods, and increase their impression of their goods. Advertising is more likely to pull more
customers
 than another
method
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method
, which is
one
 of the reasons why companies still use
this
method
. On other hand, many people believe that advertising is non-effective. It is indeed that majority of the population would skip or ignore advertisements, since online information is the most unreliable and scam.
One
 of the alternative reasons for
this
 is mainly due to those who are non-interested in
this
product
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product
. Those who are interested in
this
product
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product
,
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 would likely attempt to inform themself more about
this
product
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product
, and but them. ,
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However
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 advertising can cause a negative impact;
one
 example is that people will find advertisements extremely annoying which can cause a negative impression of the
product
 or the company itself. Overall, I think adverting is still
one
 of the most remarkable ways to let
customers
 remember their goods which is
one
 of the main
reason
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why companies still use them, and benefit from them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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