Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?
For centuries, how to be happy is still a question for humans, but most
people
in the world believe that you can enjoy your Use synonyms
life
and experience Use synonyms
happiness
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also
when you are not rich. Linking Words
However
, Linking Words
happiness
is hard to reach for some Use synonyms
people
because they always want more and the solution for Use synonyms
that is
to just be happy with whatever you have which in Linking Words
this
essay I discussed.
Linking Words
Happiness
and Use synonyms
feeling
like that were always impossible for some Replace the word
feelings
people
to find because they place high and extreme factors on their Use synonyms
happiness
. It meansUse synonyms
,
they can not be happy and enjoy their Remove the comma
apply
life
if they Use synonyms
could not
pass their factors and have whatever they want. Wrong verb form
cannot
For example
, some Linking Words
people
are always sorrowful about why they are not wealthy and it will hurt their Use synonyms
feeling
so they can not Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
sense
any Verb problem
feel
enjoy feel
inside themself. Wrong verb form
enjoyment
Thus
, those Linking Words
people
make themself abandon Use synonyms
happiness
by Use synonyms
putting
their goals unreachable.
Verb problem
leaving
On the other hand
, other groups of Linking Words
people
find that you do not have to be rich or strong to achieve Use synonyms
happiness
. You just have to accept yourself and whatever you have and try to spend your Use synonyms
life
with them. Use synonyms
For instance
, a guy who works in an office and has a normal car like Toyota is enjoying his Linking Words
life
because he is happy with his property and he does not want to cry in a corner because he does not have a Lamborgini. Use synonyms
Therefore
, being a happy person in the community is not about your car and your house, actually is about yourself and your perspective of the world.
In conclusion, Linking Words
happiness
is hard to reach for some Use synonyms
people
because they always need more and think they can be happy only if they have luxury items and more properties, but if they just enjoy the moment and what they have, achieving Use synonyms
happiness
will be way Use synonyms
easy
.Replace the word
easier
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