Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

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For centuries, how to be happy is still a question for humans, but most
people
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in the world believe that you can enjoy your
life
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and experience
happiness
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also
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when you are not rich.
However
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,
happiness
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is hard to reach for some
people
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because they always want more and the solution for
that is
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to just be happy with whatever you have which in
this
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essay I discussed.
Happiness
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and
feeling
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like that were always impossible for some
people
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to find because they place high and extreme factors on their
happiness
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. It means
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they can not be happy and enjoy their
life
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if they
could not
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pass their factors and have whatever they want.
For example
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, some
people
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are always sorrowful about why they are not wealthy and it will hurt their
feeling
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so they can not
sense
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feel
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any
enjoy feel
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inside themself.
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, those
people
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make themself abandon
happiness
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by
putting
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leaving
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their goals unreachable.
On the other hand
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, other groups of
people
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find that you do not have to be rich or strong to achieve
happiness
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. You just have to accept yourself and whatever you have and try to spend your
life
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with them.
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, a guy who works in an office and has a normal car like Toyota is enjoying his
life
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because he is happy with his property and he does not want to cry in a corner because he does not have a Lamborgini.
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, being a happy person in the community is not about your car and your house, actually is about yourself and your perspective of the world. In conclusion,
happiness
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is hard to reach for some
people
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because they always need more and think they can be happy only if they have luxury items and more properties, but if they just enjoy the moment and what they have, achieving
happiness
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will be way
easy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subjective
  • universally
  • cultural differences
  • psychological factors
  • satisfaction with life
  • emotional balance
  • personal achievements
  • social connections
  • fulfilling relationships
  • sense of belonging
  • sense of purpose
  • physical health
  • well-being
  • financial stability
  • mindfulness
  • gratitude
  • positive thinking
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